Drinking Age Should be Lowered {persuasive essay}

http://www.teenink.com/opinion/drugs_alcohol_smoking/article/48104/Drinking-Age-Should-Be-Lowered


The title of my article is "Drinking Age Should Be Lowered." I found it on the link given from the Blackville Writing site. www.teenink.com. It was written by Harold G from Wyoming, Mississippi. The main paragraph as well as the title of the piece of writing contains the thesis. The main idea in this article is that the drinking age should be lowered.

The first paragraph did catch my attention because it started out by listing off the reason's why people use alcohol. It Also explains that if the drinking age was lowered the percentage of underage drinking would also be lowered. The article has six paragraphs, all six of them relating to the main idea of lowering the drinking age.This writer involves some information in the article, for example it mentions the percentage of high school seniors that have used alcohol, "87% of high school seniors have used alcohol. That means that a large quantity of teens under the age of seventeen to eighteen have used alcohol before."

The author of this article doesn't present the other side of the argument. He mentions that in other country's it is lower but he doesn't completely present the other side. I agree to a certain extent, he is from the United States where drinking age is 21 and he wants is to be lowered to 18 or 19. I however live in Canada where the drinking age already is 19, so in a way I agree that is should be lowered and all drinking ages no matter where you live should be the same. The writer could have presented the other side of the story to strengthen its points and also use more statistics.

The conclusion of this article is decently strong, it provides another reason on why it should be lowered but also offers that if they lower it and it doesn't work out to put the drinking age back up to 21 because changed are made all the time. I did not find any grammar or spelling errors and I enjoyed reading this article, I thought it was a well done persuasive piece.